tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2920691484934690878.post7993668463211622426..comments2015-04-12T08:01:51.879-07:00Comments on Yesu Myongo: Yesu Myongohttp://www.blogger.com/profile/15470362465693349700noreply@blogger.comBlogger2125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2920691484934690878.post-39656755827618692412015-04-12T08:01:51.879-07:002015-04-12T08:01:51.879-07:00Hey Yesu I put you in my blog. Feel free to respon...Hey Yesu I put you in my blog. Feel free to respond to it or ignore it. Either one's fine. Clive Buccattihttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05599467743196163134noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2920691484934690878.post-89461058008823976932015-04-01T07:00:24.667-07:002015-04-01T07:00:24.667-07:001. Hey pal. I think a good dream would be to indul...1. Hey pal. I think a good dream would be to indulge in some sort of really "sinful" behavior. So the topic is = SIN. This type of dream would definitely be funny for your character, and also it could really add character development. However, it is crucial that you make the dream humorous. <br />2. The only thing you could improve on is to develop your plot a little more. Include more info about your captives and develop their story as well as your own. It seems as though your story is sitting still. Its a great story, just continue to develop it similar to how you did in the beginning. Whats going to happen to Yesu in the future?<br />3. Prophecy: "Don't believe what the red man tells you."Lane Mastersonhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17621366231360560439noreply@blogger.com